All your bluelining is saved in the Dave folder, a place of many treasured things, which I revisit whenever I begin a new sweep of revisions. Part 2 hasn't had a new sweep since your last round of comments, but I'll be rereading them, annotating them, and keeping them to hand while I mark up the ms, once the agent gets back to me with whatever she has to say. Whenever your comments come in, they percolate in my head with whatever other step I'm on, too. Your comments on the Sondliet chapters in Volume Two Part One had a lot to do with the battle scenes now in Volume One Part Two, and with the way I reworked the introduction of the naval characters in Volume One Part One, in the 2nd draft of the ms.
In any case, I haven't made any big changes to the events or characters in the bits of Vol1Pt2 that you've marked up since last you saw them, though I think you'll see your fingerprints on the exposition, especially about Hasilra's reforms to Beltresin military doctrine.
The major version skew is all ahead of us. Parts 3 and 4 of Vol 1 are really ungainly. The incidents and characters are pretty stable, but a lot of the scenes are in need of a total overhaul in terms of POV, and I put a lot of backstory in as it came to me, just to have somewhere for it to go before I forgot it, without any expectation on my part that I'd ship the draft around before I'd had the chance to move those things.
So, a whole new iteration of Part 2, in Word documents, by email tomorrow. Sound good?
And, again, thanks for the scotch. Haldur's deflection of Larintul owes a great deal to it.
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Date: 2005-10-01 09:56 pm (UTC)In any case, I haven't made any big changes to the events or characters in the bits of Vol1Pt2 that you've marked up since last you saw them, though I think you'll see your fingerprints on the exposition, especially about Hasilra's reforms to Beltresin military doctrine.
The major version skew is all ahead of us. Parts 3 and 4 of Vol 1 are really ungainly. The incidents and characters are pretty stable, but a lot of the scenes are in need of a total overhaul in terms of POV, and I put a lot of backstory in as it came to me, just to have somewhere for it to go before I forgot it, without any expectation on my part that I'd ship the draft around before I'd had the chance to move those things.
So, a whole new iteration of Part 2, in Word documents, by email tomorrow. Sound good?
And, again, thanks for the scotch. Haldur's deflection of Larintul owes a great deal to it.