dr_pretentious: (Default)
Sarah Avery ([personal profile] dr_pretentious) wrote2005-10-01 05:49 pm

It's Away! What Now?

And now that the manuscript is safely gone and can't be called back, I'm free to nitpick myself half to death.

If only I'd had one more month, I could have knocked a hundred pages out of it without breaking a sweat.

With a little sweating, two hundred pages. Of course, two hundred pages shorter would still be too long for prevailing market conditions.

Current page count: 986

Everybody who's friended me who knows anything about the publishing industry is now gasping for breath, having spewed coffee on the computer screen in a combination of amusement, horror, and disbelief at the sight of that figure. With a manuscript that long, questions of quality are completely moot.

And that's Volume One after I cut the first book in half. The first draft of my original conception of Volume One was longer than that when I still had a third of the story left to tell, so this is an improvement. But, damn.

Have I done a word count of the current working draft? Why, no. If I thought too hard about a word count, I would weep.

When the Shiny Young Agent opens the box, she will take one look at the size of the manuscript, and then ship it back unread. I provided her with a prepaid shipping airbill for the purpose. Either she'll return it unread, or she'll have a heart attack over the length. Possibly, she'll have a heart attack from the exertion of trying to lift the box.

The current working draft weighs about three pounds more than my niece did when she was born.

Of course, the Shiny Young Agent has been warned that the book is too long, and that the second half of the working draft is still very rough. She knows, and she wanted it ASAP anyway. I keep reminding myself so. Dan keeps reminding me so. Lots of people do. I'll confess, I'm fishing for reassurance, but not about that. Wait for it.

Tried celebrating last night, and last night that kind of worked. Went to see Serenity with friends. (Joss Whedon giveth and Joss Whedon taketh away. Praised be the name of Joss Whedon.) Went out for a drink afterward. Talked like a pirate while seizing tables for our too-large group. Lovely, lovely. Yet, today, the sense of doom kicks in.

Submitting the poetry for publication never felt like this. My dissertation defense was harder, but that was due largely to the structural violence of the university. Certainly, the professors on my committee were enthusiastic partisans of my work, but the traditions accreted to the occasion were designed to inculcate terror. The Shiny Young Agent is not interested in inculcating terror, is instead cordial and encouraging. Can't blame anybody for the sense of doom, unless it's me.

So, a question for those of you who've sent your novels out into the world before, especially if you've done it more than once: Is this normal?

Anyhow, there are five short stories that all want me to write them right now. There's the short prequel to outline before Nanowrimo starts in November. The one thing I can't do is tinker with the manuscript I've just sent out until I hear back from the Shiny Young Agent.

So tomorrow, I roll up my sleeves, put up my hair, and get back to work.

[identity profile] dr-pretentious.livejournal.com 2005-10-01 08:55 pm (UTC)(link)
Tonight or tomorrow. I had to send Vol1Pt2Ch10 out without ever having read the whole chapter straight through in one sitting. Some of the gaps got filled as late as 4pm Friday. So today, I read the whole thing over. It's got some structural problems and some sentence-level infelicities, but some of the scenes play well. Anyhow, I need to enter the changes for the little hiccups, and then you'll have three big chapters coming your way. Over 100 pages. The last thing you saw was Laurebes at En Tangur Brei's ritual grave-robbing party, right? Or did you get the Vaia chapter in which she tries to sue herself in Guild Court? I know you got the Battle of Lizard Rock, but after that, my memory gets fuzzy.

[identity profile] twoeleven.livejournal.com 2005-10-01 09:28 pm (UTC)(link)
the last bit i have is the grave robbing.

i'd rather you send me a whole chunk (either or both parts), as what i've got is already blue-lined, and i'd like to start fresh. that'll make it easier for you to figure out my comments on the current draft.

i'm also a little worried about version skew. there aren't any internal dates in either of the sections i have of pt2, but i got the first five chapters on 16 feb, and the sixth and further on 21 mar. my blue-lining is dated 30 may, but i haven't the faintest idea if you did anything with it.

[identity profile] dr-pretentious.livejournal.com 2005-10-01 09:56 pm (UTC)(link)
All your bluelining is saved in the Dave folder, a place of many treasured things, which I revisit whenever I begin a new sweep of revisions. Part 2 hasn't had a new sweep since your last round of comments, but I'll be rereading them, annotating them, and keeping them to hand while I mark up the ms, once the agent gets back to me with whatever she has to say. Whenever your comments come in, they percolate in my head with whatever other step I'm on, too. Your comments on the Sondliet chapters in Volume Two Part One had a lot to do with the battle scenes now in Volume One Part Two, and with the way I reworked the introduction of the naval characters in Volume One Part One, in the 2nd draft of the ms.

In any case, I haven't made any big changes to the events or characters in the bits of Vol1Pt2 that you've marked up since last you saw them, though I think you'll see your fingerprints on the exposition, especially about Hasilra's reforms to Beltresin military doctrine.

The major version skew is all ahead of us. Parts 3 and 4 of Vol 1 are really ungainly. The incidents and characters are pretty stable, but a lot of the scenes are in need of a total overhaul in terms of POV, and I put a lot of backstory in as it came to me, just to have somewhere for it to go before I forgot it, without any expectation on my part that I'd ship the draft around before I'd had the chance to move those things.

So, a whole new iteration of Part 2, in Word documents, by email tomorrow. Sound good?

And, again, thanks for the scotch. Haldur's deflection of Larintul owes a great deal to it.