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In Praise of Longhand
Nov. 4th, 2005 12:36 amI'm pleased with today's work.
Weird, huh?
Anyhow, I looked back over the problems in the opening, figured out where the parent-child dynamic I wanted to convey was breaking down in the dialogue, and fixed it by replacing two sentences. I know I'm supposed to banish the Inner Editor entirely, but those little fixes made it possible to produce 1053 new words, scattered through three different chapters. Today, Stisele conspired with her ghosts while she was 7 years old, gravely offended a guerrilla leader and despaired of ever being lucky in love while she was 28, and watched from the afterlife as the living sabotaged her funeral rites for reasons I have not quite figured out yet. She gets to the correct afterworld, and when I've Seen her there in the late volumes of the big series, she's had both her hands. Why would the Augurs want to keep her right hand? If they keep it, why isn't she missing it 200 years later? Well, that's a problem for another day. The detail will work itself out, or I'll cut it later.
Everything's livelier in longhand.
Weird, huh?
Anyhow, I looked back over the problems in the opening, figured out where the parent-child dynamic I wanted to convey was breaking down in the dialogue, and fixed it by replacing two sentences. I know I'm supposed to banish the Inner Editor entirely, but those little fixes made it possible to produce 1053 new words, scattered through three different chapters. Today, Stisele conspired with her ghosts while she was 7 years old, gravely offended a guerrilla leader and despaired of ever being lucky in love while she was 28, and watched from the afterlife as the living sabotaged her funeral rites for reasons I have not quite figured out yet. She gets to the correct afterworld, and when I've Seen her there in the late volumes of the big series, she's had both her hands. Why would the Augurs want to keep her right hand? If they keep it, why isn't she missing it 200 years later? Well, that's a problem for another day. The detail will work itself out, or I'll cut it later.
Everything's livelier in longhand.
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