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Here Dan and I are, languishing on the couch. He's reading the completed first draft of the novella, pen in hand. Whenever he busts out laughing, I say, "What? What?" and generally make a pest of myself. Either the draft doesn't suck, or I married my ideal reader. Well, maybe both.

Last night, I sprinted through writing the last ten pages of the story. Today, I read those pages, to find out how it ended. I mean, I knew what happened, but nothing about how it played. This afternoon, I finally turned the introduction from a list of bulleted points into a real opening. I have yet to read the whole draft straight through. That's tomorrow's treat.

I need some beta readers who are not Pagans, and some who do not live in New Jersey.

The characters, being reasonable approximations of New Jerseyans, swear. Probably a lot, by, say, Minnesotan standards. G rated dialogue in New Jersey? It just doesn't happen. I've actually toned the dialogue down, so that it evokes, without faithfully reproducing, the Garden State's wealth of profanity. I need someone far enough away from here to tell me whether what remains still sounds excessive.

The characters, being reasonable approximations of Neo-Pagans, are completely blase about nudity. None of the nudity is described graphically. As in the lives of actual Pagans, the nudity is not the point. It's never, in itself, the thing that makes the story go. Bodies are described only so far as to note that two of the characters are extensively tattooed, and one of the characters has gills--things that are noticeable even when the characters are clothed. I tried leaving the nudity out altogether, but the verisimilitude crashed, so I had to put it back in. My concern is: Is the nudity that remains in the draft distracting to non-Pagan readers, to the point of obscuring the story?

I'm also worried about whether the pacing is spongy, whether the opening is weighed down with expository burdens, the usual.

Still, today I'm happy with it. Today, it's a nice little piece. It has a beginning, a middle, an end, characters who do things, characters who decide things, and some stuff that's at stake. It weighs in just under 28,000 words. Life is sweet in Averyland.

And, now that I'm at a stopping point with it, my characters may stop demanding that I listen to Fountains of Wayne albums on a daily basis. I love the way Fountains of Wayne takes familiar forms and forces those forms to carry content so completely alien to the pop tradition. It's like watching Elizabeth Bishop force sestinas and villanelles to tell linear narratives would be, if Bishop had also tried to be irresistibly danceable. But I think I've listened to "Halley's Waitress," "Stacy's Mom," and "Bright Future in Sales" several hundred times apiece in the month of January.

These days, while I'm in the thick of a writing project, I don't really procrastinate much. No cat-vacuuming here. Which means that, as the end of a draft approaches, the house slides into a state of true squalor. There's probably a surface in here somewhere that doesn't need mopping, but I may have to mop all the other surfaces to figure out which one that is. Today, I finally got around to taking down the Yule tree and putting the ornaments away. Have I mentioned the exemplary patience of my spouse? Exemplary patience. Wow. That, and he keeps laughing at all the right sentences. I'm a lucky girl.

Date: 2006-01-25 10:51 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] citabria
Hey, what the fuck do you mean, we New Jerseyans swear? ;)

Congratulations!

Date: 2006-01-26 04:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vgnwtch.livejournal.com
Yeah, wtf lady? People who move to NJ don't become total ass-clowns either. I mean, say it to our faces and we'll fuck your shit up. Or something.

But, seriously folks, I can't wait to read it.

I have done nothing on my writing for ages. I'm beginning to really get the urge again (of course, while I'm trying to organise moving the entire household in a matter of weeks). I think I have not been reading enough Actual Books over the past few months, and that this is why I haven't been writing.

Date: 2006-01-26 05:58 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] newroticgirl.livejournal.com
heehee... this made me think of trying to explain to my (Kentuckian) fiancee how we drive here in Jersey -- f you, you effing effer!!

Date: 2006-01-26 10:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dr-pretentious.livejournal.com
The guy I dated while I was in college was a Jersey boy, and we all thought he was The Angriest Driver In The World. There was good-natured mockery about it on a regular basis. And he would always say, "But you don't understand! That's how everybody drives in New Jersey!" It was, to us, incomprehensible. Even to me, and I'd learned my city driving skills in Seoul, where Korean citizens can (or could in the late 1980s) get drivers' licences without ever having to take a road test.

But after college, I moved to New Brunswick.

And made the acquaintance of Route 18.

These days, it seems I spend about half my waking hours on Route 18.

Poor Josh. When I apologized for years of teasing, even my apology had profanity in it, because I was talking about driving. We had a good laugh over that.

Date: 2006-01-26 11:19 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vgnwtch.livejournal.com
I used to be terrified of getting in the car with T. Or his mother. He's mellowed out tremendously. Now I'm just terrified of getting in the car with his mother.

Date: 2006-01-26 10:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dr-pretentious.livejournal.com
Ass-clowns?

That's right up there with Mother Pus-Buckets!

I was cleaning out my study yesterday (see above regarding squalor), and found the first copy of your ms that you gave me, buried under several strata of unrelated paper. Is that still current enough that markup would be useful to you?

You write what your read. When I stall out, it's often because I've been reading the wrong stuff.

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